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Friday, 23 October 2020

Description Writing week 2 term 4

  We have been working on our describe writing.  We have to write it in present tense and include what we can see, hear, smell, taste and feel.  Another thing we are are trying to do is 'show not tell'.  

Here is a piece of writing I have been working on.  I hope you enjoy it.



POP, went the giant party popper as the celebrations began. Squealing, giggling sounds of children ring out into the living room. Musical sounds of the happy birthday song float in the air as the candles burn brightly as the sun. 


1 comment:

  1. Hello Xaviar.I could just imagine all this noise coming from the party.You have used some great describing words and I felt like I was there enjoying the food and the fun.
    Have you ever had a memorable birthday party that you would like to share some of what happened with us?.

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