We have been working on our describe writing. We have to write it in present tense and include what we can see, hear, smell, taste, feel. Another thing we are are trying to do is show not tell
The bright sun is beaming onto my arms and wrinkled tired face. A gentle breeze brushes across my face helping cool me from the hot rays of sun. Hard wooden slats of wood burn into my soft skin as I rest heavily against the frame of the seat.
Trees rustling in the distance, birds singing sweet songs high above me, a little dog yelping for help and children shouting loudly. Footsteps thump the ground in front of me as I imagine who might be walking by my seat, were they adults strolling by or some of the loud squealing children.
Wafting smells of chocolate and purple rippled boysenberry ice cream fill my senses and make me want to get my own.
Hello Xaviar.
ReplyDeleteI really like the use of words.Your story made me feel like I was there,watching the man.I can't wait to taste the boysenberry ice cream,especially on a day like today.